Sounds great. I would defantly read this if it was a book.
(Completed) Fan Fiction: The New Demon
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22 January 2012 - 04:46 AM
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"Good FREAKING Day to you,OH SIR PANCAKES!" "Jack,i told ya NOT to eat the purple flowers!" "Why,OH SIR BEEF?!" "THEY KILL YOUR BAINCELLS!"
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Sounds great. I would defantly read this if it was a book.
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Any time,Shad.
"Good FREAKING Day to you,OH SIR PANCAKES!" "Jack,i told ya NOT to eat the purple flowers!" "Why,OH SIR BEEF?!" "THEY KILL YOUR BAINCELLS!"
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As to your question, I constantly look for fanfics to read. When I found this site, I looked in theories and found many different when, combined, could form a good story.
That is a surprisingly good idea.
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As to your question, I constantly look for fanfics to read. When I found this site, I looked in theories and found many different when, combined, could form a good story.
Well, if this story at all roots from that idea then it must be a pretty good idea because I thought it was a fairly good story with a really creative idea.
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<p><p><p>(Because my post could not contain any more characters or something, this is Part Two of The New Demon. Sorry for any inconvienience. By the way, I would like more feedback on what should be added and knowledge of wether or not Im doing a good job.) "What does Puu Black want with Sand Zone?"
Quote had no answer. They had to find Puu, however, so they kept moving until they reached the Sun Stones. "I thought Omega released their curse!" said Curly, surprised. "Does that mean that Omega is..."
Before finishing her sentence, Black Monster X came crashing through the wall, running over the Sand Crocs in their pits along the way. Wasting no time, Curly brought out the nemesis and fired a round of lightning at the closed metal gate protecting Monster X's inside. It shattered from the power of the lightning. The black crystal exited through the opening, but Quote brought out King's Blade and threw it into Monster X. As King's spirit blew a hole into Monster X, Curly shot at the crystal to stop Puu Black from emerging. Monster X fell to the sand and blew up. Instead of a cat, Ballos's dog came out. Then, Puu Black materialized from the crystal. He flew at Quote, but a missle from Quote stopped him. They all stopped when they heard a dark yet familiar laugh come from below them. Puu Black chuckled. "You are too late, boy. Ballos has risen." Curly answered by firing more lightning from the nemesis at Puu Black, but he had already trned into mist. As he merged with the crysal, he broke through the Sun Stones, which re-formed behind him. "How about we go see if we can find something at the end of Sand Zone," Curly said. Walking through, they were careful of the devestation left by Monster X. Nothing troubled them on their path to the back of the Zone. They sawOmega just sitting in the sand. Almost seemed too easy that he would just sit there. "Help me," said Omega. Curly and Quote jumped in surprise, not knowing he could talk. "Puu Black has awakened Ballos! I am guessing you came to open the Sun Stones. First, I need you to take this with you." Omega said, motioning with hos eyes at something on his body. It was a bomb, similiar to the one Quote made to save Kazuma."Why do you have this?" asked Curly."Use it to help defeat Puu Black before the Demon Crown is restored!" With that, Omega dissapeared into the sand."I almost forgot!" Curly said. "Ballos's dog said that as long as Ballos lives, the crown will be restored! Who wants the crown that badly? Puu Black?"Having no answer, they headed back to the Sun Stones which were, as Omega promised, open. When they jumped in, however, they saw that the warehouse's security had increased. Skullheads were everywhere, presses were lodged in the sand, and many blocks had a picture of the Eye of Ballos on them, like at Sacred Grounds. At the bottom of the pit, they saw the Red Ogre commanding some Crows on where to put the new presses. It took four crows to lift one press, and they were pretty slow about it. The Red Ogre noticed Quote out of the corner of his eye. Turning to him, the ogre said, "Thief! What are you doing here? Come to gloat about stealing my medal? I am general of this army, and I won't let you get anything over me this time!"With that, Red yelled at the army to attack. Quote launched his missles at the oncoming army while Curly flew over them with her machine gun, but she was caught by a press. When Quote ran out of missles, he backed away and started launching the fireball. Curly got back up from the press attack and brought out here nemesis. Curly ran back to Quote to help the fight, but they were losing the fight quickly. Out of nowhere Omega fell from the ceiling on top of the Red Ogre. Omega called out, "Soldiers! I'll fend them off! Get to the warehouse!" Heeding this, Quote and Curly flew through the army, which was slowly coming over the shock of Omega appearing. They got to the warehouse with no more troubles. There was a new door on the warehouse, but it had no visible way to open it. Suddenly, an eye opened on the door! It was the Door! "Hello, soldiers. I am here to guard the warehouse from little nuisances like you," it said.Quote aimed his missle launcher at the Door. The Door was not surprised to find no problems with himself after. "Your minor missles couldn't kill a critter!" scoffed the Door. "Got anything else to try, little boy?" As a matter of fact, Quote did. The eye on the door got wide. Quote was holding Omega's bomb. "Be reasonable," said the Door nervously. Quote, paying no attention, set the bomb, and Curly and him backed away./////Mimiga Village..."Kanpachi! Are those fish ready yet?" asked Jack, "These mimigas need to buy food!"Tney were in the food hall. Jack was supervising the dinner. (continued on page 3)
Quote had no answer. They had to find Puu, however, so they kept moving until they reached the Sun Stones. "I thought Omega released their curse!" said Curly, surprised. "Does that mean that Omega is..."
Before finishing her sentence, Black Monster X came crashing through the wall, running over the Sand Crocs in their pits along the way. Wasting no time, Curly brought out the nemesis and fired a round of lightning at the closed metal gate protecting Monster X's inside. It shattered from the power of the lightning. The black crystal exited through the opening, but Quote brought out King's Blade and threw it into Monster X. As King's spirit blew a hole into Monster X, Curly shot at the crystal to stop Puu Black from emerging. Monster X fell to the sand and blew up. Instead of a cat, Ballos's dog came out. Then, Puu Black materialized from the crystal. He flew at Quote, but a missle from Quote stopped him. They all stopped when they heard a dark yet familiar laugh come from below them. Puu Black chuckled. "You are too late, boy. Ballos has risen." Curly answered by firing more lightning from the nemesis at Puu Black, but he had already trned into mist. As he merged with the crysal, he broke through the Sun Stones, which re-formed behind him. "How about we go see if we can find something at the end of Sand Zone," Curly said. Walking through, they were careful of the devestation left by Monster X. Nothing troubled them on their path to the back of the Zone. They sawOmega just sitting in the sand. Almost seemed too easy that he would just sit there. "Help me," said Omega. Curly and Quote jumped in surprise, not knowing he could talk. "Puu Black has awakened Ballos! I am guessing you came to open the Sun Stones. First, I need you to take this with you." Omega said, motioning with hos eyes at something on his body. It was a bomb, similiar to the one Quote made to save Kazuma."Why do you have this?" asked Curly."Use it to help defeat Puu Black before the Demon Crown is restored!" With that, Omega dissapeared into the sand."I almost forgot!" Curly said. "Ballos's dog said that as long as Ballos lives, the crown will be restored! Who wants the crown that badly? Puu Black?"Having no answer, they headed back to the Sun Stones which were, as Omega promised, open. When they jumped in, however, they saw that the warehouse's security had increased. Skullheads were everywhere, presses were lodged in the sand, and many blocks had a picture of the Eye of Ballos on them, like at Sacred Grounds. At the bottom of the pit, they saw the Red Ogre commanding some Crows on where to put the new presses. It took four crows to lift one press, and they were pretty slow about it. The Red Ogre noticed Quote out of the corner of his eye. Turning to him, the ogre said, "Thief! What are you doing here? Come to gloat about stealing my medal? I am general of this army, and I won't let you get anything over me this time!"With that, Red yelled at the army to attack. Quote launched his missles at the oncoming army while Curly flew over them with her machine gun, but she was caught by a press. When Quote ran out of missles, he backed away and started launching the fireball. Curly got back up from the press attack and brought out here nemesis. Curly ran back to Quote to help the fight, but they were losing the fight quickly. Out of nowhere Omega fell from the ceiling on top of the Red Ogre. Omega called out, "Soldiers! I'll fend them off! Get to the warehouse!" Heeding this, Quote and Curly flew through the army, which was slowly coming over the shock of Omega appearing. They got to the warehouse with no more troubles. There was a new door on the warehouse, but it had no visible way to open it. Suddenly, an eye opened on the door! It was the Door! "Hello, soldiers. I am here to guard the warehouse from little nuisances like you," it said.Quote aimed his missle launcher at the Door. The Door was not surprised to find no problems with himself after. "Your minor missles couldn't kill a critter!" scoffed the Door. "Got anything else to try, little boy?" As a matter of fact, Quote did. The eye on the door got wide. Quote was holding Omega's bomb. "Be reasonable," said the Door nervously. Quote, paying no attention, set the bomb, and Curly and him backed away./////Mimiga Village..."Kanpachi! Are those fish ready yet?" asked Jack, "These mimigas need to buy food!"Tney were in the food hall. Jack was supervising the dinner. (continued on page 3)
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22 January 2012 - 05:33 PM
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This is crazy. Also, you don't have to put <p> in front of your fanfic on the first page, considering HTML code isn't allowed.
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It automatically puts it on 3DS. I'll clean it up on my computer later. Also, crazy in a good or bad way?
This is crazy. Also, you don't have to put <p> in front of your fanfic on the first page, considering HTML code isn't allowed.
It automatically puts it on 3DS. I'll clean it up on my computer later. Also, crazy in a good or bad way?
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A good way.
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Well, if this story at all roots from that idea then it must be a pretty good idea because I thought it was a fairly good story with a really creative idea.
Thank you for your feedback. I never expected this to be so popular!
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